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Alone in dark decay and dust
on old wallpaper floors
-spark, fizz, hiss-
a scant stick on scorched fingers
the glow exposes shaky shadows
flickering against the soot

Close to the floor, concealed by cloth,
something shimmers twice
Feathers of flame dance on glistening black
wet and shimmering still waters,
They savor the silent sensation
this impassive camaraderie from the
moons in another pair of eyes.

The yawning window welcomes a gust
levitating curtains and hair.
It shatters the moment,
murders the gleam
the swain recoils and
vanishes between the cracks.
Written for :icondreamsinstatic:'s Poetry Screams Contest

The prompt I chose is in the title:
-In the Glow of Candlelit Eyes

Questions for my readers:
Who/what is present?
Where are they?
How do you feel while reading?
How do you feel at the end?
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:iconflarimar:
Flarimar Sep 23, 2012  Student Writer
Oooh I really enjoyed that!!! But I believe you meant camaraderie and not compradery in the 6th line of the 2nd stanza
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:icondani-the-naiad:
Dani-the-Naiad Sep 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:D HAHAHA! Yes! Something autocorrect probably did at one point. Alright. Thanks for pointing that out! :rofl:
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Flarimar Oct 1, 2012  Student Writer
Ah auto-correct helpful at times and just plain annoying at others! Of course no probs! =D
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Dani-the-Naiad Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:nod: Sure!
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:icondreamsinstatic:
dreamsinstatic Sep 20, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks for your entry and good luck!
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Dani-the-Naiad Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:excited:
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