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A Haiku and Feature

Journal Entry: Sun Sep 16, 2012, 4:37 PM
I've got a haiku for ya.

you know what? men suck, that's what,
and the moment you
think they don't, they surprise you.

Almost wrote that in a deviation, but I thought it wasn't necessarily deviation-worthy.  Just a little blurp.

Anyhow, how's everyone ELSE doing?  Funky dory, correct?  Awesome.

Here's a feature for you just for the heck of it....and since I love ya.

Like always.

dream off the sky by leelloorBlue Butterflies by Ellygator caramelizedlies are honey
from sugary tongue;
yours are toffee
melting my lips.
if love
isn't comfort food
like beef stew
or broth,
i don't think
i shall need
anything
from you
from now on.
go home, sweet boy,
don't sleep over.
i can cook for me.
© august 5, 2012 :house:
Winged by DemonMathielSunshine... by candysamuelsThe Ocean by HA91 Letter from a Loved OneDarling,
do you remember
     who you were?
Or has your heart
          frosted over-
     all despair and anger-
so far gone that your light
has all but
                    crumbled?
You were brilliant once, love.
Your radiance sang
like a Mayflower
     and your dreams
     blazed a wild beauty
     into your eyes.
Well, maybe it was my fault
for letting you believe
you would be the one
     to bring the world
     to its knees
But you would never stop
racing yourself to the sky-
     you danced with danger
     and you were shining so brightly
          the stars co
Non-material Symmetry by MarySdfghjkli want to see another world by chriseastmids rememberingRemembering
i.
I rarely remember the bridge and that lonely evening, where the season was changing its colors, and I stood, like the children stood on snowy days, looking out the window, at those two flocks of geese soaring past the city bridge. I rarely remember the section of the bridge that are your big eyes and straight nose, a smiling mouth with two dimples, the dimples of the boys that are very sweet.
Easily as the boats sway from dock to dock, the water covers the time of our life and the fisherman's oars dissolve our moments. Under our aimless boat is another world, a world split when we made that decision under the liquidating sun. I keep my eyes closed because I want to break like a fever, the way the soft river makes way for everything.
In the transience of the seasonal changes, we have all lost someone.
ii.
I told you to forget me, forget the way our movements merged with the twisted arch of a soaring forest, forget the crimson explosions on the print of the breakfast table
The world above by MrRabLothe green creature of the deep forest by ICONcreations:thumb321408481:Hallstatter See by xthumbtakxIn My Head by hakukamizakitimes when i know youll be sad by chriseastmidsbouquet by reina343:thumb322974164::thumb321814284:Reflection of the sky by IoneekJennifer Lawrence Drawing by Live4ArtInLAyou will never be a ghost by chriseastmidsUndergrowth by XxSonoKyuuketsukixXHelena Drawing by Live4ArtInLAI wish it would rain down by LuizaLazar grandfatherold green shirt
inside leather jacket.
faded pants
over a pair of sneakers.
bonnet
above favorite shades.
brown wallet
chained to his pocket.
to this day,
i still keep
his silver watch
and ash tray.
i remember
his upset eyes
because i used
his bicycle once.
i remember
the disappointment
in later years
for i failed to live up
to expectations.
forgive me,
i'd rather
put together
memories this way:
he was a
cigarette-puffing,
wood-chopping,
banca-riding,
harmonica-playing,
transistor-listening,
flower-planting
bloke.
he lit firecrackers
with his mouth
through cigars.
he would pick
meat anytime
over fish,
over veggies.
he liked pomade,
he liked hair gel more.
he'd be happy to know
everything's high-tech now:
he would have marveled
at cellphones,
LCD TVs, i-pods,
laptops and
digicams.
he and i knew enough of deprivation:
it stared us both in the face,
it was the background of our life.
his generosity in my childhood
eased mine.
do i make more of him
in this poem?
if this were
a decent poem
Lily by BriscottMirrored by ElenihrivesseTo another place, another space by LuizaLazarcrossfires by mebiliaRise And Shine by JustinDeRosa IsolationismI find it easier
To feel good about myself
When others are not present
Am I much different?
No.
It's not my fault you don't agree
You've got this notion of me
That simply isn't true
There are only
so many times I can
fake a smile and laugh
My cache is running low
So please
Hold your tongue
when it really matters
Keep your visits and your phone calls
I don't want to hear your voice
I want to remember when I was young
And you were perfect
When I was innocent and hopeful
And you were always just...there
Disillusionment seems to always lead to isolationism
It's just so much easier
:thumb321040050: Letter from a Loved OneDarling,
do you remember
     who you were?
Or has your heart
          frosted over-
     all despair and anger-
so far gone that your light
has all but
                    crumbled?
You were brilliant once, love.
Your radiance sang
like a Mayflower
     and your dreams
     blazed a wild beauty
     into your eyes.
Well, maybe it was my fault
for letting you believe
you would be the one
     to bring the world
     to its knees
But you would never stop
racing yourself to the sky-
     you danced with danger
     and you were shining so brightly
          the stars co
colder then the shadows in an empty heart by chriseastmids. falling . by NahamutChild Rapunzel by MoonchildinTheSkyWalk This Way by Kaz-D


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journal skin by banishedcatgirl233

  • Mood: Lonely
  • Listening to: children...all the time...
  • Reading: The Secret Life of Bees
  • Watching: Extremely Loud and Incredibly Close
  • Playing: with my stiff neck muscles
  • Eating: something...soon...I hope....
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:iconbriscott:
Briscott Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
Thank you for adding my drawing to your feature
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:icondani-the-naiad:
Dani-the-Naiad Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure
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Nahamut Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012
Thank you, dear, for the feature ^////^ :heart:
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Dani-the-Naiad Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:blowkiss:
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cristinewakesuphappy Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i just read the lit pieces. (they're all really good reads.)
my most :+fav: are these 3:

:+fav: isolationism
:+fav: letter from a loved one
:+fav: an afternoon of graphite and strangers breath


:bow:
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:icondani-the-naiad:
Dani-the-Naiad Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:) Yes, they are fabulous! So glad you took the time and you liked them!
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:iconellygator:
Ellygator Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Love the haiku - so true sometimes! It reflects the way you can almost get whiplash over some of the back-and-forth behavior they have.

Thanks also for including my butterfly bracelet in your fabulous feature!
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:icondani-the-naiad:
Dani-the-Naiad Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:) Thanks. Yes, men behavior oddly for sure. I think women can be pretty back-and-forth sometimes too. But a man can be so vague it's ridiculous!

I love your butterfly bracelet. I want one! :love:
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:iconellygator:
Ellygator Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Well, I made the green one for $60 and the gold one would go for $90, simply because the beads for that one contain real gold and palladium in the glazes and are more expensive. If you're interested, please note me. We can make something with different colors, too.
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:icondani-the-naiad:
Dani-the-Naiad Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow! That's crazy impressive!

I don't think I could afford it, but Oooo I would love one. :D Maybe I could drop not so subtle hints to my hubby about a Christmas gift or something. :giggle: (It would have to be more on the blunt side because he'd have to contact you through my dA account.:giggle:)
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:iconellygator:
Ellygator Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
That would be cool! I'd love to make another one 'cause these are really fun!
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:icondani-the-naiad:
Dani-the-Naiad Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:) So awesome. Well, I wouldn't hold your breath or anything. He will most likely not do it because he doesn't usually get me anything I ask for. :rofl:
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:iconellygator:
Ellygator Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
MEH, Men...
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:icondani-the-naiad:
Dani-the-Naiad Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:giggle: Exactly
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:iconcristinewakesuphappy:
cristinewakesuphappy Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:party:

i'm in a mood to celebrate
because i have received this feature from you today.
thank you so much.

these poems are special to me.
i feel good about myself right now (which rarely happens).
thanks, thanks. thanks.

:bow:
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:icondani-the-naiad:
Dani-the-Naiad Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:blowkiss: So happy to help you celebrate yourself. :w00t:
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:iconha91:
HA91 Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Universal truths, not always nice :B

Thanks for the feature! :hug:
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:icondani-the-naiad:
Dani-the-Naiad Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:D Thanks Yeah, you're right.
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Kaz-D Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you :)
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:icondani-the-naiad:
Dani-the-Naiad Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:) Always a pleasure!
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Elenihrivesse Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2012   Photographer
Thank you! :hug:
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:icondani-the-naiad:
Dani-the-Naiad Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:blowkiss:
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JustinDeRosa Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2012   Photographer
thank you! as always!
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:icondani-the-naiad:
Dani-the-Naiad Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:) My pleasure!
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:iconbriscott:
Briscott Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
Thank you for adding my drawing :)
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:icondani-the-naiad:
Dani-the-Naiad Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:) Of course!
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ICONcreations Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2012  Hobbyist
thank you ! a great honor to be here.
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:icondani-the-naiad:
Dani-the-Naiad Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:blowkiss:
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LuizaLazar Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you :heart:
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:icondani-the-naiad:
Dani-the-Naiad Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:blowkiss:
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DemonMathiel Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2012   Photographer
Thank you :D
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:icondani-the-naiad:
Dani-the-Naiad Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:) Of course!
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hakukamizaki Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2012  Student Photographer
Thank you so much Danielle! :hug:
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:icondani-the-naiad:
Dani-the-Naiad Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:) My pleasure
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:iconchriseastmids:
chriseastmids Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
thank you for featuring my work here with all these wonderful artists .... not all men suck!!!
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:icondani-the-naiad:
Dani-the-Naiad Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Of course!

...awe, Chris. They do. Not deliberately, but they do. Gotta love 'em. :)
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:iconchriseastmids:
chriseastmids Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
naaaaaaaaaaa they don't really
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:icondani-the-naiad:
Dani-the-Naiad Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:) Ok. If you say so.
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:iconchriseastmids:
chriseastmids Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
trust me :D
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:icondani-the-naiad:
Dani-the-Naiad Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ok.
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chriseastmids Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
:D
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MarySdfghjkl Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2012  Student
Thanx <3
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:icondani-the-naiad:
Dani-the-Naiad Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:blowkiss:
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Masqued-Mistress Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you for the feature, and I love your haiku! :XD: A bit of trouble in paradise?
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:icondani-the-naiad:
Dani-the-Naiad Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Of course!

And...what paradise? Who said anything about paradise? :)
Yeah there's always trouble. It's an imperfect world we live in.
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Masqued-Mistress Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Lol. Just a phrase people like to use. It is indeed an imperfect world. I think it'd be weird if it was perfect. Hehe! There's always something, isn't there?
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:icondani-the-naiad:
Dani-the-Naiad Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yup. Always somethin'
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candysamuels Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
aww thanks Dani, this is awesome and men do suck hahaha
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:icondani-the-naiad:
Dani-the-Naiad Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Of course, Candy!

Yes. Yes they do. :)
What's your story with men, anyway?
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candysamuels Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
divorced., single and plan to stay that way hahaha
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